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The Rift
PAGE SIX (PANEL ONE)
Large splash panel with three small panels near the top of the page inset into the larger splash panel. The first small panel shows Jeremiah coming out of the bathroom, crouching low, his gun at the ready (do not show the inside of the diner). Note: Pistols in this series are flechette pistols, firing what would look like razor blades (larger flechette pistols would shoot what would look like metal playing cards). Some can explode on impact, some can spin after they’ve hit their target, boring a hole through something. Sometimes you can see flechettes sticking out of people, but usually it would be like a thin bullet hole after someone’s been shot.
The second small panel inset into the splash panel focuses tight on his face, showing shock and horror. The third small panel shows a close up of the waitress’s face. She’s been shot and has fallen over the front of the bar. Her lifeless eyes are rolled back, her hair is spilled forward, blood streams from her mouth (no gore from her head).
The bigger splash panel shows the entire diner with Jeremiah still crouched low. You see the whole body of the waitress now slung over the bar, her head/face exactly as shown in the smaller panel, her arms thrown aside. Everyone else in the diner is dead, some slumped over their plates, some lying on the floor, the gentlemen who was sitting up stiff still sitting the same way, his head slumped over, eyes rolled back, with holes through his chest.
Through the window we see an air car has peeled away from the diner, a futuristic machine gun still partially sticking out of the window.
SFX (FROM AIR CAR): WHOOOSH
1. JEREMIAH (IN LARGE SPLASH PANEL, SMALL LETTERING, QUIETLY): I can’t believe they found me.
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